9月2日雅思大作文示范写作 | 教育应致力于社会价值或实现个人抱负

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9月2日雅思大作文示范写作 | 教育应致力于社会价值或实现个人抱负


September 4 2023

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本期作者:王瑜

2023年9月2日雅思大作文题目

Some people believe the purpose of education is to prepare individuals to be useful to society. Others say the purpose of education is to achieve personal ambitions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

有些人认为教育的目的是使个人对社会有用。另一些人说,教育的目的是实现个人抱负。讨论两种观点并给出你的观点。

文章结构分析:

开头段:探索教育目的是一个很有价值的讨论

主体一:分析教育在于培养对社会有用人才的底层逻辑,及其逻辑漏洞

主体二:表明个人立场,即社会性与个体性共存才是教育本质,并论证两者不可分离

结尾段:重申立场


范文及解析

Introduction

Today many thoughtful teachers, scholars and even statemen havepropoundedthat education is apathwayto equipthe pliable mindswith characteristics and talents thatconferneeded contribution to societal progress. Yet we are still unable to decide whetheroverarchingaim of education shouldtilt in favor ofsocietal values or individual aspirations.

解析

今天,许多有思想的教师、学者甚至政治家都提出,教育是一种途径使柔韧头脑具备为社会进步做出必要贡献的特点和才能。然而,我们仍然无法决定教育的总体目标是应该倾向于社会价值还是个人愿望。

❖ propound 提出v.

❖ pathway 途径 n.

❖ the pliable minds 柔韧头脑,比喻学生

❖ confer 授予v.

❖ overarching 首要的adj.

❖ tilt in favor of 倾向于

Body 1

Exacerbating rivalryin the international community,compounded byongoing challenges ranging fromdisplacementof traditional jobs caused by automation tolingering effectsof Covid-19 haveunderscoredthe significance of planning new citizens in order toparallelshifting demands to hopefullygather momentumfor a more sustainable development. Some social advancement would demand labors experienced in agriculture, chipmaking or service sectors, while others wouldnecessitatecitizens withcivic spiritsfor community engagements and volunteering. However, whether the aforementioned notion becomesexceedingly nebulousis dependent on whether pupils'intrinsic desiresare satisfied. If both educators and the educational systemdenyyoung brains' individuality in personal quest, it appears thata circle of victimizationwould nevercease.

解析

国际社会的竞争加剧,再加上自动化导致的传统工作岗位被取代,以及新冠肺炎疫情的挥之不去的影响,这些都凸显了规划新公民的重要性,以适应不断变化的需求,为更可持续的发展积聚动力。一些社会进步需要在农业、芯片制造或服务部门有经验的劳动力,而另一些社会进步则需要具有公民精神的公民参与社区活动和志愿服务。然而,上述概念是否变得极其模糊,取决于学生的内在欲望是否得到满足。如果教育工作者和教育系统都否认年轻大脑在个人追求中的个性,那么受害者的循环似乎永远不会停止。

❖exacerbating rivalry 加剧的竞争

❖compounded by 被恶化

❖displacement 工作取代 n.

❖lingering effects挥之不去的影响

❖underscore 凸显

❖parallel 适应

❖gather momentum 积聚动力

❖necessitate 需要

❖civic spirits 公民精神

❖notion 概念

❖exceedingly nebulous 极其模糊

❖nebulous 星云的/朦胧的

❖intrinsic desires 内在欲望

❖deny 否认

❖a circle of victimization 受害者的循环

❖cease 停止

Body 2

My own view is that neither social value nor personal accomplishments shouldhold swayin education; rather,equal emphasisshould be placed on being socially pragmatic and individually achieved. It is theinteractionof both that explains why daring young people enter the healthcare business and social work, which are physically demanding butemotionally rewarding. The same goes for activism and counselling, where exposition is both understandable and justified. If this were not the case, young brains would be mistakenly seen ashalf-finished goodscapable of being manufactured intostereotypesof entities. Worse, if education is centered on achieving one's personal goals,a false optimismmay emerge, neglecting a country'slooming problems.

解析

我个人的观点是,社会价值和个人成就都不应该在教育中占主导地位;相反,应该同样强调社会上的务实和个人的成就。正是两者的相互作用,解释了为什么大胆的年轻人进入医疗保健行业和社会工作,这些对令人疲惫却带来情感滋养的职业。同样的道理也适用于社会先锋分子和心理咨询业,在这些领域,其背后的解释既可理解又合理。如果不是这样,年轻的大脑就会被错误地视为半成品,能够被制造成刻板印象的个体。更糟糕的是,如果教育以实现个人目标为中心,可能会出现一种错误的乐观主义,从而忽视一个国家迫在眉睫的问题。

❖hold sway 占主导地位

❖equal emphasis 同样的强调

❖interaction 相互作用

❖emotionally rewarding 情感回馈的

❖half-finished goods 半成品

❖stereotypes 刻板印象

❖a false optimism 错误的乐观主义

❖looming problems 迫在眉睫的问题

Ending Paragraph

Finally, an overemphasis on promoting learners' practical contributions to a country or on accomplishingpersonal missionsmay be viewed as aprematurecharacterization of thecoreof education.

解析

最后,过分强调促进学习者对国家的实际贡献或完成个人使命可能被视为对教育核心的过于草率的描述。

❖personal missions 个人使命

❖premature不成熟的

❖core 核心概念

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